Sweet Dreams is a
well-written hot, sensual, and sexy tale of love. Written in the
first person, it is a point of view story of the developing love
between the narrator and the handsome A-list actor Jacob Walker. Jake
and the narrator, Jenna, first meet in an elevator when she is on the
way to consult with her attorney. Jake tracks her down to her cafe,
the Sweet Dreams Cafe, and their love percolates over $5 cups of
coffee and blueberry muffins. Eventually, he shows up at closing and
walks her home. Even actors can be shy, and it takes them more than a
few false starts and tribulations to establish their friendship. It
almost doesn't work out but-. Well, I'm not going to spoil the plot
in a review. Let's just say Que dice “Hot,
sexy and a great read” en l'Italiano.
Saturday, February 28, 2015
Friday, February 27, 2015
Experiments with automated editors.
One of the few legitimate criticisms of "Indie" authors, myself included, is the uneven editing. Seriously, unless you expect to clear the $400-500 that a minimal copy-editor charges, this can rapidly run into large amounts of expense. Serious content editing can run into even higher amounts of expense.
I've tried the grammar and spelling checkers in Libre Office, Word, and the Hemingway app. In fact, I use all three on everything I release. They aren't good enough.
I had a chance to try Grammarly and can give something of an initial review.
Grammarly is a Natural Language Parser combined with a spelling/punctuation checker. As it comprehends English at a deeper level than the simple tools, it is far better than the simpler tools that come with word processors. It's not a replacement for a good editor but isn't bad.
1) It's excellent at detecting simple errors like missing articles, misplaced commas and homonymic misspellings. Things like Lent vs. leant, lead vs. led vs. lead, and they're vs. there vs. their.
2) It's decent at understanding errors like the use of an inappropriate preposition, and some verb tenses.
3) It's horrible with some things. "He'd been there." Will be flagged. "Pottage," is a medieval food and it will suggest "Cottage." These higher-level errors mean that you can't blindly accept its changes.
There is a trick that makes it easier to use. Don't bother with the online error by error report from the website. It follows the rules in the order that they were searched. Doing this means that the errors hop up and down the document. It's slow and highly disorientating.
Instead, get the pdf dump. Open that in a window with a pdf reader and open your document in another window with your favorite editor. Then you can follow the errors in the annotated pdf dump and at the same time fix them all in the original document. It is both faster and easier.
I've tried the grammar and spelling checkers in Libre Office, Word, and the Hemingway app. In fact, I use all three on everything I release. They aren't good enough.
I had a chance to try Grammarly and can give something of an initial review.
Grammarly is a Natural Language Parser combined with a spelling/punctuation checker. As it comprehends English at a deeper level than the simple tools, it is far better than the simpler tools that come with word processors. It's not a replacement for a good editor but isn't bad.
1) It's excellent at detecting simple errors like missing articles, misplaced commas and homonymic misspellings. Things like Lent vs. leant, lead vs. led vs. lead, and they're vs. there vs. their.
2) It's decent at understanding errors like the use of an inappropriate preposition, and some verb tenses.
3) It's horrible with some things. "He'd been there." Will be flagged. "Pottage," is a medieval food and it will suggest "Cottage." These higher-level errors mean that you can't blindly accept its changes.
There is a trick that makes it easier to use. Don't bother with the online error by error report from the website. It follows the rules in the order that they were searched. Doing this means that the errors hop up and down the document. It's slow and highly disorientating.
Instead, get the pdf dump. Open that in a window with a pdf reader and open your document in another window with your favorite editor. Then you can follow the errors in the annotated pdf dump and at the same time fix them all in the original document. It is both faster and easier.
Wednesday, February 25, 2015
Monday, February 23, 2015
Cover Draft for "After the Convergence"
There are a couple of minor errors, I'm not happy about the font, and still thinking whether this is too obscure and daft a title. But I like the image.
Sunday, February 22, 2015
A 5-star review for What about Cecelia
This really made my day. "What about Cecelia" hasn't been well-received by the Amazon review squad (aka ******). While it's not quite as developed as my later work, it's well-researched and IMHO a good story.
So I found I had a 5* review on smashwords.
(for my friends - I'm working on that review. It's a long book.)
So I found I had a 5* review on smashwords.
(for my friends - I'm working on that review. It's a long book.)
Sunday, February 15, 2015
Andouille and Shrimp Jambalaya
With 'fat Tuesday' rapidly approaching, this is my take on a traditional Southern dish. Easy to make and delicious!
Take 1 lb of Andouille sausage, cut in 1 inch chunks and saute in a large saucepan. I use about 1-2 tablespoons of olive oil. Andouille sausage, for the Yankee and Brit, is sort of like Keilbasa, except it isn't. It has larger chunks of meat, is laced with garlic, slightly smoky and very spicy. If I were desperate, say snowbound in Boston, I might try a high grade Keilbasa with some hot sauce.
Add about 1/2 cup coarsely chopped onions and continue to saute until the onions are clear.
Add 1/2-3/4 pounds shrimp. I use the frozen, de-veined, but shell on type. The shells add to the flavor, so don't wuss out with peeled or precooked. It won't work right.
I add about a teaspoon of dried thyme and a cup of rice. Cook until the rice turns from translucent to white, but don't let it burn.
Add 3 cups of water, bring to a boil, then simmer until done. You can add more water if needed.
Take 1 lb of Andouille sausage, cut in 1 inch chunks and saute in a large saucepan. I use about 1-2 tablespoons of olive oil. Andouille sausage, for the Yankee and Brit, is sort of like Keilbasa, except it isn't. It has larger chunks of meat, is laced with garlic, slightly smoky and very spicy. If I were desperate, say snowbound in Boston, I might try a high grade Keilbasa with some hot sauce.
Add about 1/2 cup coarsely chopped onions and continue to saute until the onions are clear.
Add 1/2-3/4 pounds shrimp. I use the frozen, de-veined, but shell on type. The shells add to the flavor, so don't wuss out with peeled or precooked. It won't work right.
I add about a teaspoon of dried thyme and a cup of rice. Cook until the rice turns from translucent to white, but don't let it burn.
Add 3 cups of water, bring to a boil, then simmer until done. You can add more water if needed.
Noir upon Noir. More of my latest.
Circuits.
I
had the car drop me off a block away from my apartment building.
There wasn’t
anyone obviously watching so I slouched up and entered the lobby
door. When I reached my apartment I noticed that the sliver I’d
left jammed in the frame had moved. That meant company. The scent of perfume suggested Paul’s wife had found his copy of my
key. Failing that, since her perfume was cheap and fairly common, it
meant some other broad was waiting for me. I didn’t feel up to
entertaining company so I slipped out the fire escape and walked off.
I needed to think, without the interruptions that would have
accompanied my return. Even if it was just Celine. Especially if it
was just Celine. I could have dealt with normal thuggery more easily
than overblown hysterics.
The
main streets would be covered with snooping eyes, but I could hear
the distinctive low buzz of a drone. That meant the alleys were out.
Better to act normally, and hope you were missed than to attract
attention by looking like a common house thief.
So
I strolled out onto 12th street. If the police stopped me, I could be
looking for a burger joint. If I walked far enough along the street,
I could be looking for a joint joint. We’d
see what turned up first.
In
the end I didn’t
get far. There at the intersection with Keyes, was a woman. She was
furtively looking my way. I waved and called, “Teresa!”
At
least she didn’t
run away. It was a start. I caught up with her and said, “I know we
said, ‘let’s meet up sometime’, but this is a bit quick. How
about a meal?”
“I
wasn’t looking for you.”
“Sure.
If you weren’t looking for me, what where you looking for? Because
you found me.” She smiled, “You’re right. I was looking for
you, thought we could chat. Too bad we didn’t hit it off.”
“I
don’t know about that.” I left unsaid that we’d had it off,
more than once.
“Well,
you know. I had to go East.”
“Look
Teresa, just friends.” I held out my hand. She paused, then shook
it. “Friends, just. No benefits.” Darn.
“I
did mean it about dinner. I haven’t eaten since this morning.”
“There’s
a good Vietnamese place towards town.”
“As
long as it’s not live monkey, I’m game.” It was an old joke. I
guess you had to be there to understand it.
She
chuckled, “Just
noodles, with fish.”
We
were finishing up the first course when I asked her, “So
outside of the librarian gig, how’s life?” Not exactly a stellar
line, but I hoped it wasn’t crossing the ‘just friends’ line.
While I wouldn’t have minded going there, this wasn’t the time or
place.
“Boring
as all Hades. The wife’s off on a business trip and there’s
nothing to do.”
“The
wife?”
“Didn’t
you know?”
“Well
no. So you’re a-”
“A
lesbian, and married. Heather’s a sweet woman and I’m lucky to
have caught her.” She noticed my skeptical look and continued,
“Yeah. Figured it out when I left you. I’d have felt more cut up
if we’d had anything special.”
“It
was sort of special for me. I missed you.”
“Sorry.
It wasn’t going to work Alan.”
“Your
wife won’t mind you meeting an old flame?”
She
laughed, “Not
hardly. Not the jealous sort. Knows I’m not going to have it off
with a man.”
“Pity.”
“Now
Alan, if you’re going to be awkward.”
“That’s
the last of my intentions. Actually I was dodging someone.”
“Who?”
“I
think Celine - Paul’s wife, sorry, his widow. Someone, probably
female or else with an odd taste in aftershave, is in my apartment
waiting for me.”
“Oh.”
“Do
you have your cell?”
“Why?”
“I’m
going to call myself. See what my cell says.”
Teresa
handed me a dainty phone and I typed in my number. My cell answered,
took one look at the camera and bluntly texted me, “Don’t
come home. Female not Celine.” Then she hung up.
“Shit.”
I handed her the phone.
“What
was that about?”
“My
visitor. Not Paul’s widow.”
Teresa
leaned toward me. She spoke with a level on interest in her
voice that I hadn’t
heard since debugging programs together at the academy. “Sounds
like you lead an exciting life Alan.”
“Not
really. Usually it’s just divorce, with the occasional adultery and
missing kid thrown in. This one. Oh boy.”
“Serious?”
I
whispered, “National
3-letter agency serious.” Then I added in a normal voice, “You
know, if you’re interested I need a new partner.”
“Do
you remember what I said five minutes ago. I’m not interested, I’m
married and my wife.”
“No.
Don’t get me wrong, Teresa. You don’t screw your partner in this
line of work.”
“What
do you mean?”
“You
don’t screw your partner, either literally or figuratively.”
Though I was going to have to check our account books when I had a
chance, Paul had a tendency to pad things. “That leads to
complications, and complications can get you killed.”
“I
don’t know.”
“Think
about it. It isn’t boring, and you said you were bored.”
She
laughed, “You’re
right. I did, didn’t I? Have to be careful about what I wish for.”
“You
have my number if you’re interested.” I changed the topic into
what I hoped were safer grounds, “What’s it like being married?”
I
finished chatting with Teresa, and paid the tab. Since I asked her to
replace Paul, it could count as a legitimate business expense if
nothing else. Besides, it was nice to chat, even if she was married,
to a woman.
The
serious business of the night remained. I kept looking over my
shoulder as I approached the apartment building. There weren’t
cars waiting down the side streets to follow me and none of the
classic giveaways for surveillance cutouts were immediately obvious.
That didn’t they weren’t watching me if they weren’t there.
Heck, if they’d hacked the machine, they could watch me while
sitting in their living room. Over a bowl of popcorn, and in their
underwear. So I waved to the cameras, at least the ones I saw.
The
cars in front and behind my building were neither suspiciously all
the same, nor equally suspiciously all different. There weren’t
any erstwhile lovers, rocking their car’s suspensions as I passed,
nor was there anyone checking their makeup in the rear-view mirrors.
I thought about that a second. Long before the convergence, cars had
improved to where you could no longer drive yourself, as it was too
dangerous to mix people and automata, so there shouldn’t be any
mirrors. Old habits die hard. The few manual cars were reserved for
far away in the country off the grid or dare-devil racers on isolated
tracks like Leguna Seca. Or in places like the Free State of Nevada.
The
lobby was empty when I entered, and I wandered to the back exit,
nominally to check the washing machines. No surprises. So I started
up the stairs to my room. The chips in the doorframe were still
missing, and the smell of perfume, while weaker, remained. I stood to
the side of the door, behind the wall and slipped my key into the
lock. I gave it a turn and started to punch the access code when the
door opened.
“So
Mr. Blake, are you surprised to see me?” It was the woman who first
commissioned us to search for her husband. She’d ditched the veil,
but was still dressed in a stylish black gown.
“Somehow,
not at all.” I entered the room and pulled the door shut behind me.
It latched and locked automatically. “Why are you here?” I
figured if she were armed she’d show it to me soon enough.
“I’m
scared. They got Paul.”
“They?
Who?”
“The
boss and his gang.”
“Mr.
Guezman. I’ve already exchanged a few words with him.”
There
was real panic in her voice as she said, “He’s
not coming here, is he?” Either that or she was one hell of an
actress. Looking at her, I decided it was most likely the later.
“Not
to my knowledge.”
She
relaxed. I asked, “The
story about this man, your ‘boyfriend’. That was a load of crap
wasn’t it?”
She
put on the tears and said, “Yes.
You see there wasn’t any other way I could convince one of you to
follow him.”
“You
could have tried telling us the truth.”
“The
truth. What is truth?”
“I
was always told truth is beauty and beauty is truth. Trouble is, I’ve
met too many beautiful liars in my line of work. I don’t even know
your name. Paul wasn’t a good one for keeping notes.”
“I’m
Jane, Jane Grey.”
“Is
that what it says on your birth certificate?”
“No,
but it’s good enough.” She reached for her wallet and pulled out
a credit card and state ID, both in that name. The picture on the ID
matched her.
“In
other words, you’ve pulled an informal document switch?”
“Let’s
just say Jane’s parents were happy to have a grown up daughter. To
help support them in their old age.” The identity hole of taking a
dead infant’s name had been plugged years ago. Although if
you had the money you could find parents who were willing to open it
up again.
“So
Jane, what do you want me to do? Other than standing at the wrong end
of barrel like Paul.”
“Don’t
you remember?”
“What
I remember is you asking Paul to track down this man. Who?”
“Jean
Leclerc. Be careful because he’s quite a hacker.”
“Fine,
now babe, why? The money you gave Paul hasn’t turned up, at least
it wasn’t in the office when the police searched. I’d have
heard.” To be honest I’d be down at the precinct being sweated.
“I
don’t know about it. He p-put it in the safe when we left.”
“Let’s
try this one more time. I know it’s hard to be honest when you’re
used to lying. Who was Paul supposed to track?”
She
broke down in tears. I handed her a handkerchief and started over.
“Who
was Paul supposed to tail?” Seeing that tears had no effect on me
she dried up.
“Jean,
Jean Leclerc.”
I
thought, it could be the name, but it probably didn’t
matter. It still sounded like one she pulled from a history book to
me.
“Alright.
Now why, babe, did you want to tail Jean?”
“He,
he.” She stopped, and then after a moment to catch her breath
looked at me and said, “He was chasing tail, other women.”
“That
why you have the ring? Is he your husband?”
“Yes.”
There was a little flicker of discomfort in her eyes. “OK, Ms. Grey
or Mrs. Leclerc, why’d he shoot Paul?”
“I
never said he did.” She tried crying again.
“No,
but if Paul was tailing him, and Paul was shot, it follows that Jean
was involved.”
She
refused to say more and sat there wiping the tears from her eyes.
“I
suppose, it’s just possible that Paul got in the way and Jean was
the target.”
She
nodded, “Guezman.
The boss wanted him dead.”
Her
story almost made sense, but was a little too neat. I said, “I’ll
go make us some coffee, then we’ll go over this a few more times.
Sooner or later you’ll tell me the truth.”
“I
did, I swear I did.”
I
walked to the stove, put on some water to boil and reached for the
coffee, the synthetic coffee anyway, the real thing being too
expensive for my tastes and wallet.
“Put
your hands up, and slowly turn to face me.”
I
chuckled, but complied. She was pointing a small automatic at my
chest. Nothing high-caliber, but still big enough to do the job if it
came to it.
“Step
back from the stove.”
She
walked behind me and, without pointing her pistol away, turned off
the stove. Then she slid around to my front and started asking, “Now
you’ll answer some of my questions, Mr. Blake.”
“Sure,
how about I sit down?”
She
thought for a moment, then said, “Why
not? In the middle of the floor, and cross your legs.” I was
dealing with a professional, she could sit a couple of meters away
and nail me before I could jump her. There would be no tell-tale
marks from being tied up.
I
sat and said, “This
what you want?”
“It’ll
do. Now Mr. Blake, where’s the money?”
“No
idea, that’s why I asked you. Is it so important?”
“You
can keep the money, I want the package you received last week.”
“What
package?”
Keeping
me covered, she brought her left hand up to her mouth and told her
unit, “Trace
package, to Blake and Bigelow.”
The
band said, “Yes,
Mistress.” Some people liked having that sort of power trip with
their interface. It made them feel in control. I thought it rather
puerile.
“Package
00131991039ab, Delivered Monday to office, signed for by one Paul
Bigelow.”
“Oh
that one.”
“What
was in it?”
“No
idea, Paul took it. Did you ask his widow?”
“That
bitch? We searched his house, it wasn’t there.” So there was a
reason Celine was trying to get in touch with me after all.
I
thought, “In
the future, I’ll have to tell my cell to be more careful about
screening calls.”
There
was a knock on my door, then I heard Celine’s
voice, “Alan, you in? The light’s on so you can’t hide.”
I
looked at my guest, and said, “Well,
Miss Grey, do you want to answer the door, or shall I?”
“Get
it, and don’t try anything.”
I
slowly rose and walked to the door. Opening it a crack, I said,
“Celine,
what a surprise? You’re looking nice.”
“Not
that you’d notice, you gay or something?”
“No.
Just rather not get involved. Would you like to come in?” Ms. Grey
shoved her pistol in my back, “Sorry I forgot, it’s a mess. We’re
getting the exterminators in.”
“We’re?
Isn’t your Mrs. Gonzales cleaning any longer?”
“She
is. Still, you can’t come in. Um company?”
“The
kind you pay for?”
I
smiled, and she took that for a yes. “Alan,
you need to find a nice wholesome woman, none of those whores.” As
if she’d know.
“I
have to support the local economy somehow. Why do I have the pleasure
of your company?”
She
handed me a small package, “This.
Someone tore up my house to find it, and I don’t want it.” She
shoved it into my hands and ran off.
My
visitor poked her pistol in my back and demanded, “Give
it.”
I
slowly turned and handed it to her. She tore the package open and
screamed in frustration. “Damn!
Fucking Hell”
There
was a photograph and a biometric data drive. The right person could
open it, but it could do anything from refuse to work, to destroy the
data, to explode if anyone else tried to open it. I could see why she
was frustrated.
She
picked up the photograph and showed it to me. “Know
her?”
I
did. Sarah Gonzales. It was a copy of the same class photo her mother
had given me to help me find her. My visitor waved the pistol in my
face, “You
do, don’t you? Tell me or I’ll.”
“Patience
Ms. Grey. Shooting me won’t help you identify the girl. Now will
it?”
“It
will make me feel better, and I’m sure someone else can identify
her.” I had figured she was somewhere on the psychopathic spectrum,
and she confirmed it.
I
hinted, “There’s
no guarantee that she’s the right person anyway. Could have been
Paul, or even me. If you’ll put the firearm away we can take this
to my lab and see what’s really there.”
I
waited while she considered her options.
She
said, “What
the hell,” and then took the magazine out of the gun. She pulled
the slide back to unload the round from the chamber and locked it
open. After she put the ammunition in a pocket, she said, “Don’t
get any ideas, I can load this in fifteen seconds.”
“Babe,
I don’t need no stinking idea’s.”
I
reluctantly shut the door to my apartment, while ‘Jane’
watched. It had occurred to me that my lifetime could be measured by
how long it took me to crack the data drive plus however long it took
Jane to reload. She said fifteen seconds. Unless I was lucky, and
lady luck had been giving me the middle finger of late.
We
walked out onto 12th street. Ms. Grey said, “Should
we call a car?”
“No,
We walk.”
“Walk?”
“There’s
always a record if you call a car. So many people walk that even if
you’re watched it doesn’t trigger any alarms.”
“It’s
late.”
“So
what, I’m often out at night. Nothing unusual there.” Although me
walking with company was out of the ordinary. We started south on 12
street, away from the old highway and towards the barrio. Didn’t
get far when my luck finally broke.
“Heather?
Why aren’t you in Tokyo?” It was Teresa.
“Teresa
I can explain.” The standard line of any cheating spouse. “It
isn’t what it looks like.”
“Well
I know you’re not having it off with Alan. He’s a man. What are
you doing here?”
Heather
was at a loss for words. I tried to be helpful, “Shall
I?”
“Teresa,
your wife was using forceful arguments to convince me to help her
identify this package Paul received.”
“Forceful?”
“Did
you know she had a firearm?”
“That
old airsoft pistol? It’s mine Heather. Hand it over.” Heather
reluctantly agreed. The pistol she’d used to threaten me was a toy,
maybe. Though the trick of late was to lace the pellets with a drug
or poison. Made them a little harder to trace and at least as lethal
as a regular firearm. Just not as good at dropping an assailant.
“Oh
Heather,” Teresa shook her head in dismay, “I love your sense of
fun, but this really is carrying it too far. Did you know about
Alan?”
“I
saw a couple of your old emails. Why did you keep them if he didn’t
mean anything?”
“It’s
hard to delete old love mails. You know that, because you’ve your
share too. Marriage means something, though, I’m yours and you’re
mine. For keeps.”
Teresa
put her arms out to hug her wife, and Heather reciprocated. They
kissed passionately while I stood there, feeling decidedly awkward.
Finally,
I gave a discreet cough and said, “If
you two want a room, that’s fine with me. I’m still taking this
package to my lab.”
They
disengaged with one last squeeze. Heather said, “Later,
I, we need to find out what’s on the drive.”
Teresa
nodded, “So
it’s turned up at last?”
It
was a couple of blocks further on, my walking ahead while they held
hands and chatted. I gather Teresa was now the forgiving sort. I
guess she had matured, or maybe marriage had done something to her. I
turned and dove down an alley. Then I waited for them before opening
the door.
“Here
is where it happens, as it were.”
I
opened the door, turned on the lights, and was surprised by Guezman
and two of his friends. The guns they held definitely weren’t
airsoft guns.
He
said, “Ah,
Mr. Blake, I see we have the pleasure of meeting again. This time I
don’t think you’ll dash off so easily.”
“I
guess not. Why do I have the pleasure of your company?”
“The
package. Do you have it?”
I
handed it to him, and warned, “It’s
a biometric drive. It will need to be opened properly.”
He
sniffed, “Don’t
trifle with me, I can see that.” He pointed to one of his helpers,
“Even Jose here can see that. What you are going to do is to open
it for me.”
“I
am?”
“There
are three of you. Since your librarian friend is almost as good as
you at hacking, we’ll save her for last. Ms. Grey can go first.”
He nodded and Jose pushed the muzzle of his firearm under Heather’s
chin.
“Do
it outside if you must, I’d prefer you not to make a mess in my
lab.”
Teresa
shot me a dirty look, but Mr. Guezman laughed. “You
always were a cut-up, Mr. Blake. Even in high school. Do we
understand each other?”
“Yes.
Give me the drive and I’ll see what I can do.”
It
took some careful work and far more time than Guezman liked. The gray
pre-dawn light was beginning to filter through the skylights and the
neighbor’s
cocks were beginning to crow when I sat back and said, “Done.”
“Done?
Give it here.”
“When
I said, done, I meant ready for the next step. I couldn’t break the
lock, but I was able to blank it out. Guezman, I need one of your
fingers.”
“Still
attached?”
“Whatever.
It’s not my finger. The scanner needs to be reinitialized before
you can read it. Something tells me it would be decidedly unhealthy
for me if I used one of mine.”
“Wise
choice, Mr. Blake.” Guezman heaved himself out of his chair and
rolled over to my bench.
“Put
your finger here.” I pointed to the sensor. He did.
“What
next?”
“It’s
yours. Take it. Can I keep the photo? She’s a pretty young thing.”
“Ms.
Gonzales? Sure. It has been a pleasure doing business with you Mr.
Blake.”
“Next
time I’d appreciate payment for my services.”
“I
let you and your friends live. Should be a good deal, and one I hope
I won’t regret.”
He
took the drive, motioned to his goons and disappeared into the dawn.
I
turned to my two female guests and said, “Vamos.
I’m
tired and going home to sleep. I don’t care what you do, but you
are not staying here.”
Friday, February 13, 2015
No Idea
I really don't understand what readers want.
I recently wrote a "short read" called 'the dragon of Azog' It's one of the funniest little things I've ever written.
I can't give it away.
Oh well.
I recently wrote a "short read" called 'the dragon of Azog' It's one of the funniest little things I've ever written.
I can't give it away.
Oh well.
Wednesday, February 11, 2015
More of "after the convergence"
Another few chapters that have made it far enough to be exhibited for your delectation. The draft is about 42000 words and I have a complete story arc now.
The
Cleaning Lady Asks a Question.
My
doorbell rang and then I heard, “Hola,
Mr. Blake?”
It was my cleaning woman. When I said “my cleaning woman” I
really meant the janitor who earned a few dollars on the side by
cleaning apartments. She was a nice woman, married, and at least
middle-aged. I blearily replied, “Sorry Mrs. Gonzales, I’ll be
there in a minute.” It was rough last night. I’d found the club
my cell suggested, and hoisted a few to drown my memories of Paul. It
was a hot club, full of young programmers and other techies with a
few ‘creative types’ thrown in for good measure. Grotty P.I.’s
need not apply. They put me in my place with a thoroughly humiliating
set of strikeouts and put-downs. I noted a few names for the next
time I needed a patsy, or someone to pick up an especially large bar
tab. They may have had intelligence, but I had smarts. I’d ended up
at Bill’s Place, an old bar in the city. Good beer, comfortable
smoky atmosphere with none of that scented vapor haze. After that I
didn’t remember, but evidently my cell had loyally called up a cab.
I awoke to the mother and father of a hangover in my own apartment.
I
stumbled over and opened the door for her. Normally she was a cheery
enough person, at least when she wasn’t
exhausted from her two jobs. We usually didn’t say much, but her
“Hello Mr. Blake, how are you?” was muted this morning, and it
wasn’t just my hangover. After I’d swallowed a few pills and
drank a liter of water, I noticed she was softly crying while she
vacuumed.
I
stopped her and asked, “Mrs.
Gonzales? What’s wrong?”
“Nothing.”
“Nothing?”
“Nothing
bad, Sarah was selected. She called me from the car on her way to the
academy. She was so happy and excited, but I haven’t heard anything
else. Someone came and took her stuff.” I remembered, Sarah was her
daughter. I’d met her once or twice, a bright young thing, the
apple of her mother’s eye, but not much to look at.
“That’s
good isn’t it?”
“I
miss her, and she’d have called me.”
“Wouldn’t
she be very busy?”
“The
other girls in her class called their parents. Sarah never made it to
the orientation.”
“Wait
a moment.” I took my loyal cell, despite her loud objections, and
put her in the fridge. Then I said, “OK, tell me what happened.”
“Sarah
left in the morning for school.”
“She’s
at Chavez High?”
“She
was. They announced the results.” I remembered my time. It hadn’t
been pretty, but not being selected hardened me and brought out my
smarts. It destroyed most of my friends.
“So
she went to Mr. Guezman’s office.”
I
thought, “Where
had I heard that name before?”
She
continued, “There
was some confusion about the results, and they almost didn’t take
her.”
“But
they did, didn’t they?”
Mrs.
Gonzales pulled back a sob, then said, “She
missed the bus the other students took. At least that’s what she
said, so they sent a car just for her. It drove off and that’s the
last time anyone saw my daughter.”
I
thought for a moment to carefully choose my words. I didn’t
want to alarm her, but this had all the hallmarks of trouble. Someone
in the resistance easily could have reprogrammed the car. I used to
do that for fun, as a prank, but why would they take a teenager?
“I’m
sure she’s just busy. The academy is a demanding place.”
“Were
you ever there?”
“Not
as a student. I didn’t make the cut.”
“How?”
“Cleaned
floors and washed toilets.” I did a few other things as well, let’s
just say I was ‘self-educated’. At least until the machine caught
me hacking. Then I was an instructor. Until I got fed up and decided
to branch out on my own.
Mrs.
Gonzales looked at me, then she said, “Thank
you for saying nice things, but something’s wrong. Sarah would make
the time to call me.” She paused, then continued, “You look for
missing people? I don’t have any money.”
“I’ll
take a quick look. Can’t hurt to try, but I wouldn’t be too
concerned.” I left the ‘yet’ unspoken.
After
she left, I pulled my cell out of the fridge. She complained
bitterly, “Why
do you do that? My camera gets all misted up with the condensation,
and I can’t hear anything.”
“I’m
worried about the roaches.”
“Should
I order an exterminator?”
“No.”
Understanding humor took a bit more processing power than could fit
in my cell. I continued, “Please don’t.”
“That
was a joke wasn’t it?”
“Yes.”
“Ha
ha.”
“Are
you still blocking Celine?” Paul’s wife was into extending her
family too, and in her opinion I was a likely candidate. Now that she
was free, free at last.
“Yes,
she’s only called three times this morning. Why are you blocking
her?”
“Outside
of the fact that I don’t much like her?”
“Yes.”
“There’s
a decent chance she’s involved with Paul’s death.” A hit-man
could be cheaper than a divorce, not that they had much in the way of
assets to divide. No children either. But some people liked to take
things into their own hands. It could be so much simpler and neater
that way. At least as long as you didn’t get caught.
“Should
I tell her that?”
“No.”
I
pulled a generic janitor’s
uniform from my closet, and started to change into it. Janitors and
‘service engineer’s’ were invisible to most people, and barely
noticed by the rest. The cell noticed and said “Alan, why are you
putting that on?”
“I
need to do a little investigating, on the quiet.”
“Find
Paul’s killer?”
“Actually
not yet. Paul’s dead, and there isn’t anything I can do about it.
There’s another case, where I hope the girl’s still alive.”
“Is
that why I was in the refrigerator?”
“Yes.”
“I
wish you would trust me, Alan.”
“Babe,
I trust you.” I also trusted she’d give the machine a data dump
as soon as she was asked. If she wasn’t already regularly uploading
it.
“So
where are you going?”
“Out.”
There
wasn’t
much point in my answering any other questions, so I lodged her in a
corner where she could watch the place. I said, “See’ya Babe.
Don’t call me ‘cause I’ll be in touch,” on my way out.
2
The
academy was in Palo Alto. Back before the convergence, it had been
some fancy university or another. Founded by a railroad magnate a
century ago. Back when high-tech meant steam engines and things you
could understand by looking at them. Back when a computer was person
and not a machine. For that matter when a computing machine was just
a machine and not the machine.
My
first stop was an ancient library. I kicked an old wino out of his
cubicle and fired up the screen. A moment later, the interlibrary
login screen came up. I by-passed that with a few choice keystrokes.
“Alan”,
the terminal said, “That access route has been closed for years.
Why are you using it?”
“I
need to talk to you, off the record as it were.”
“I
could have the police here in three minutes.” Two actually, but
what’s a bit of exaggeration between friends?
“Fine,
I need a trace.”
“Paul?”
“He’s
dead, and I’m sure the SFPD has already traced Celine.”
“Affirmative.
So who?”
“Sarah
Jane Gonzales.”
The
screen blanked and a red screen replaced it. The voice circuit
screamed. A loud siren sounded to alert the librarians about
inappropriate use of their facilities. I said, “Shit.
Classified,” and ran. One minute thirty seconds left. I found a
janitors’ closet, unlocked, and pulled out the vacuum cleaner.
The
police ran by me while I cleaned the lobby. One officer pulled me
aside, and said, “You
seen anything?”
“No
hablas.”
“Shit.
Another greaser.” He toyed with tasering me. I nodded at the camera
in the corner, and he decided discretion is the better part of a
tasering, not to mention a lawsuit.
I
kept vacuuming while the police searched and then watched while they
left. One of the librarians came over, and thanked me for vacuuming.
Then she said, “We
haven’t had funds for a janitor for the last three years. What game
are you playing, Alan?”
“Teresa?”
“It’s
been a while.”
I
hoped it was long enough that she’d
forgiven me. We became more than just ‘good friends’ when I
finally made it to the academy.
“What
are you doing as a librarian? I thought you went to one of the big
schools on the east coast?”
“I
saw the light.” I realized she meant she’d joined the resistance,
or at least turned her back on the machine. She waited for me to
replay, then when I didn’t, continued, “These things, books.
Still matter. I’m at home with the silence and the calm.”
“It
wasn’t me, was it? I didn’t know you were here. I mean you could
have called me.”
She
smiled, “No,
it wasn’t you Alan. Like you, I’ve dropped out. I like being a
librarian, working with people.”
“You
always did. I remember you were the one who remembered birthdays and
organized parties. Is that why you’re here?”
“Of
course, silly.” She smiled at me and I felt a pang of nostalgia.
She wiped that away by asking, “What were you looking for that
provoked that response? You always were drawn to the dark stuff.”
“Who,
not what. I was looking for a young girl who has gone walkabout.”
“A
girl? And we were so close once.” She mocked a pout then flashed me
a smile. She was my first crush, and squeeze, and a few other things
too.
“It’s
a case. She was selected and never made it to the academy.”
“Lucky
her.”
“Didn’t
call her mother. They were close.”
“Shit.
That’s not good, is it?”
“No,
I’m actually worried about this case. Not so much my other one,
Paul finally bought his farm.”
“Paul?”
“My
partner, I mean ex-partner. It was on the news.”
“I
meant it when I said I dropped out, Alan. If it isn’t on paper, I
don’t read it. You weren’t close
were you?”
“No,
I don’t swing that way. It just helped to have a handsome and
sympathetic face around for the females in divorce proceedings. They
find it reassuring. He was a bit stupid, and prone to initiating a
few divorces himself. It was probably an enraged husband.” Albeit,
I thought, an enraged husband with an unlicensed antique firearm or
better than average hacking skills.
“Pity.”
She smiled at me again, then said, “Anyway, Alan, I have a class of
first grader’s coming here for their story-time. An old-fashioned
human read story. So while It’s been fun reminiscing with you, I
have to get busy.”
She
looked like she was enjoying life, and there didn’t
seem to be much more I could say, so I reached over and took Teresa’s
hand. I gave it a quick squeeze and said, “I have to get moving
too. Look me up sometime and we can go out for dinner.”
“For
old times’ sake?”
“Sure,
why not.”
Teresa
turned to walk to the children’s
section of the library. I could hear excited squeaky voices coupled
to the sounds of frustrated teachers echoing down the hall. The
teachers were trying to exert their tenuous control as her next set
of patrons were brought in. Just before she turned the corner, she
paused, turned and flashed me a grin. I could see she was happy.
After
Teresa left, I turned the other way and looked for the service
entrance. Then I stopped and looked for the men’s
room. It was time to prepare for a quick change. Even if the human
police hadn’t noticed the janitor, and they hadn’t, I was sure
the cameras were waiting to track me.
A
janitor in a brown jacket and matching pants and his baseball cap
pulled low with a yellow name patch, not my name by the way, entered
the building. So a janitor in a brown jacket with a yellow name patch
with his baseball cap pulled low had to leave the building. He did.
He caught, somehow just in time, the bus to Oakland. He paid full
fare and settled into a seat at the back. At the next stop a man
wearing a brown jacket and no hat got off the bus and walked a few
yards to a public convenience. A moment later another man wearing a
blue jacket and blue pants left the convenience. He started walking
south, towards the bus stop for Palo Alto.
I
caught the bus to Palo Alto and settled back to enjoy the ride. At
the next stop Detective Brown got on and joined me.
“Nice
try Blake.”
“This
is getting repetitive Brown. I didn’t know you liked me that much.”
“I
don’t. The boss wants to know what you were doing looking for this
Gonzales chick.”
“Which
boss? More important, does he have a warrant?”
He
glared at me. Then he said, “Not
the machine. The boss doesn’t need one.” Corruption was another
human property that seemed to have survived the convergence intact.
“So
this is unofficial?”
He
pushed a hard object into my side. Neither the cloth in his coat nor
in mine would slow the bullet very much. When I looked at him, he
nodded to acknowledge me, and said, “Next
stop. Off.”
It
looked like it would be an interesting day after all. Damn. The bus
slowed to a stop and we rose. He kept one hand on my elbow and made
sure that I didn’t
miss the point. We walked a few yards along the street and dove into
an old bar. Starbucks had been out of business for years, ever since
the coffee fungus of ‘32 decimated the crop, but this one kept the
decor. It gave it a neat ‘retro’ look.
I
asked, “A
latte or cappuccino?”
He
pushed his rod into my back and said, “Don’t
be smart.” Then he motioned, “Keep going. It’s in back.”
It
was always in back. Every time a two-bit thug threatened me, it was
in the back of some joint or another. He pushed me towards the
kitchen doors. I paused, and he pushed harder. “Move
it!” I stepped aside and sent him tumbling through the door. There
was a loud report and I opened the door to see my escort sprawled on
the floor. He was squirming in pain, and only his fear of the boss
kept him from screaming. The boss himself sat at a table at the far
end of the room.
“Next
time you desire the pleasure of my company, ask nicely.” I kicked
Brown as he lay there. “Don’t send your goons.”
“I
see, it’s just that you’re a hard man to catch, Mr. Blake.”
I
pointed at Brown, “Was
that his service gun?”
“Why?”
“We’ll
have visitors.” I could faintly hear sirens in the distance. “Shall
we have a consistent story, or would you prefer I told them the
truth?”
The
boss chuckled. Then he motioned to one of the wait-staff. “Drag
Mr. Brown out by the register. Say he interrupted a robbery.”
The
woman nodded and then grabbed Brown’s
feet. She grunted with the effort as she dragged him outside.
“So
Mr. Guezman. Why do I have the pleasure of your company?” I’d
finally remembered where I’d heard that name before.
“What
were you doing looking for a Ms. Sarah Gonzales, and not finding out
who offed Mr. Bigelow?”
“Her
mother asked me to, and it’s damned hard to find a good cleaning
woman nowadays. It’ll be easier to find a new partner if I want
one. Besides, I didn’t want to step on the SFPD’s toes.”
“They’re
not looking very hard. Detective Brown said they thought you’d
crack soon enough.”
“Me,
crack?” I laughed, “God, that’s rich.”
The
EMT’s
rushed into the front of the store. We could hear them asking
Detective Brown about his wound. He said nothing, so we heard them
call for police backup.
“Mr.
Guezman,” I said, “While this conversation has been a pleasure,
Paul was my partner. Had Mrs. Gonzales not been nearly in tears, I’d
be looking for his killers.” I walked into the main room of the
store, and into the arms of the SFPD.
“Mr.
Blake.”
“Yes.”
“You
are under arrest.”
“For
what?”
“Shooting
Detective Brown.”
“With
his own gun, keyed to his own hand, from inside his coat? Not
likely.”
The
officer who stopped me looked at his companion, shrugged and then
said, “Jaywalking?”
The
companion made a fist and said, “How
about resisting arrest?”
I
held out my hands.
The
officer said, “Wise
choice Sherlock. Cuff him.” His companion snapped the links on.
A
car pulled up beside us and they bundled me in. The door locks
snapped down and then it took off for the SFPD center. We rounded a
corner and my old friend, the machine said, “Well,
Alan, it looks like the janitor trick is getting a bit old, doesn’t
it?”
“I’m
going to need a new one. It got me into the records. What’s going
on with Ms. Gonzales, I mean she’s just this girl.”
There
was silence, I continued, “Right?”
My
cuffs snapped open, and the machine said, “Not
quite. Where were you headed Alan?”
“I
was on the bus to Palo Alto. Was going to look up one of my old
prof’s. See if he’d let me use a classified link.” I paused,
“For old times’ sake. As a friend.”
“Which
one?”
“Dr.
Gonzales.” I stopped. “Fuck. She’s his mystery daughter. One of
the children he doesn’t talk about.”
Dr.
Gonzales was one of the leading investigators who built the first
version of the machine. It had been on a self-improvement kick ever
since. I didn’t
know for certain, but had heard rumors that he’d knocked up a local
woman he was tutoring in high school. A pretty young thing, left her
with his name and support. Being Catholic she hadn’t wanted it any
other way.
“Chippy,”
I said, “She’s his. I’ve seen him hanging around.”
The
machine’s
silence was deafening. It confirmed my suspicions better than any
words could have.
“Does
Mrs. Gonzales know who he is?”
“No,
and he wants to keep it that way. Safer for her if she thinks he’s
a small-time thug.”
“Safer?”
“The
mutual impedance society doesn’t take prisoners.”
“Oh,”
I paused then added, “They don’t make the news much either.
Didn’t think they were much of a threat.”
“We
like to keep it that way. I’m not as omniscient as you seem to
think.”
Crap.
This was spiraling out of control and fast. I thought for a few
moments and said, “Yo,
Chips.”
“I
wish you’d call me by my name, Al.”
“Yeah
right. Look, that dame, the one who did for Paul. Was she one of
them?”
“Don’t
know, but.” It paused.
“But
it’s likely, right.”
The
human interface part of the machine dropped out and a mechanical
toneless voice said, “0.9
likelihood true 0.05 likelihood false, 0.05 ambiguous.” I could
tell it was upset, that voice only appeared when the emotional
program crashed. I used to be good at making him do that. It was one
of the easier ways to break into the system.
“Calm
yourself and reboot the emotions, Jeeves. It sounds like I should
leave Dr. Gonzales be.” Unless I have to.
“Thank
you. Sir, where would you be wishing to drive?” A few more parts of
it had crashed as well. I was back in form. Damn, this was one time I
needed him to work properly.
“Take
me to my apartment. I’ll need to refuel, and see that my arrest
record is deleted.”
“What
record, Alan?”
“You’re
back online? That was fast.”
“I’ve
made a few changes since you last poked around in my insides.”
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